3rd Quarter Submission

For our first revision my partner and I moved the opening credits from the end to the beginning of the opening scene. We did this to make it not seem like a short film or a trailer. The second revision my partner and I did was re-shooting the scenes with the detective in it because the dialogue did not sound natural and the actors seemed nervous. When we were reshooting we decided to make the detective a girl because we had some difficulties with the detective's make-up. Also we had the actors wear different clothes to help show that the interrogation is a different day. By doing this it helps our film look more natural and make more sense. For my partner and my third revision we changed the title to The Unknown because we felt that No Trespassing as the title did not relate to the film that much. Were as The Unknown gives the idea that the girls do not know what is on the other side of the fence. My partner and I also moved the title to the beginning and off of a black screen to help get rid of the idea that it is a trailer because most opening credits do not use black screens in our genre.

Revision 3- Title

For the third revision my partner and I change the title to The Unknown because we felt that No Trespassing as a title did not really relate to the film. Were as The Unknown gives the idea that the girls do not know what is on the other side of the fence and that they do not know what happened to Mia. Also we moved the title over the slow motion to act as a transition from the interrogation to the events that lead up to the disappearance of Mia. Also the title over the slow motion instead of the black screen help get rid of the idea that the credits are a trailer because most opening credits in our genre do not use black screens.